I got a chance to unveil these shenanigans and my first handful of games with this deck went pretty well. I did bring the land count down to 22 before I even started but still managed to flood 4 out of 6 games. I realized that 4x Birds of Paradise, 4x Llanowar Elves and 3x Cultivate was a little much; even with only 22 lands.
I felt like the deck did a pretty solid job of controlling the field but my regular playgroup is all veterans and excellent deck builders; they didn't let me keep any hard locks on the board. I found myself constantly wanting a way to maintain control or, even better, win the damn game. I might bump the Asceticism count to 4 because they really are that important in this deck. Also, I will drop the aforementioned elves and replace them with some other effect that does 1 damage on command. Spikeshot Elder comes to mind but I would love suggestions.
I want to keep the targetting effects to strictly damage effects so that they play nice with both Horobi and DPoR. I would honestly like ones that are free or cost 1 mana but I'm not sure that's an option. What's out there that I can use?
Also, not once was I able to burn people out because ALL of my burn went to creature removal. Suddenly my win condition shifted from "pretty much my entire deck" to "Olivia and 2 titans". Eww... Anyone have any thoughts on a win condition?