change dissipates to remand - recommended by author - also, he recommends changing the sideboard's telling time to a remand.  I'd change the maindeck's telling times to ponders, I think.  Read them carefully.  Well, instant v. sorcery, for starters.

Preordain could be serum visions, but it's more expensive.

Perhaps train of thought would be better than whispers of the muse.  Yes, I'm pretty sure it would.  And it gets around counters with replicate.